Finish my demo, please comment

[miguel1 17]

Hi guys,

 

Finally i finished my first demo!!

Since this is my first project, i would like you guys to comment, and giving me advices so that in my next project i do things right

i would like you to tell me where sould i work more, like mapping or somethig else.

 

anyways here's the link

(I reuploaded, i think it works now) http://www.mediafire.com/download.php?1te2nzoqwml

 

 

The Mist

Story: you will start the game, having a strange dream. In that dream you are told, by a very strange and at the same time sinister voice, that the world is in danger. But when you wake up, and the world is still as peaceful as ever, why would that guy tell such lie, you think to yourself? But after a series of events you will witness your kingdom being under attack, but not just your kingdom, other citys are also being under attack! You will then be told that the only way to stop the attack is by destroying 5 magical crystals that are spread all over the world. But can you destroy them all, before the end of the world?! And just who is that strange voice that is appearing in your dreams?

 

Screenshots:

 

http://img203.imageshack.us/i/topofmountain.png/ (top of mountain)

http://img126.imageshack.us/i/kingsroom.png/ (King's room Boss)

http://img237.imageshack.us/i/northgate1.png/ (North gate)

http://img209.imageshack.us/i/secretpassage.png/ (Secret passage)

http://img83.imageshack.us/i/battlemode.png/ ( eg. of a battle)

 

 

this is a just a test of my skill, my real goal is to make another game, called Dark Matter, and the main sentence will be: KILL, lol

 

Enjoy,

miguel1

[Polraudio 122]

Umm... can we have some information on it and maybe some screenshots. Most people wont download something unless they know a little about it first.

We don't even know the name.

 

Your title should always be the name of your game.

[miguel1 17]

ok i'm going edit my post, thanks Polraudio, i forgot XD

anyways i think there is a problem with the download, could you download just to see if it is running because in my pc it isn't.

thanks

[Kiriashi 117]

I'll check this out when I get on a computer with RMXP on it.

 

Criticism:

The story-line doesn't sound the best, but I understand that this is just for a test of skills. If it were a real game, and when you make you real project, make sure you steer away from cliches' and be a little more in-depth with your story. Hope that helps! :lol:

 

 

I'll tell you what I think when I try it out.

[ShinyToyGuns 29]

I don't know whether you forgot to include some files with it or something, but when I tried opening it, it said "Unable to find file Audio/BGS", so either you forgot to include some stuff, or the download is corrupted.

[miguel1 17]

I don't know whether you forgot to include some files with it or something, but when I tried opening it, it said "Unable to find file Audio/BGS", so either you forgot to include some stuff, or the download is corrupted.

 

 

yes that's what happens in my pc too, and i'm pretty sure i included everything... the solution i got in my pc was to copy the missing folders (BGS; ME; SE) from any other project and paste it to my project and it worked...

i going to try to upload it again but i'm not in my pc right now...

[miguel1 17]

Ok guys, i've reuploaded the game, and now it works

and i've also put screenshots

 

enjoy

[Tomo2000 60]

I would have liked to help but I can't simply because Nod 32 (I'm fairly sure thats the most up-to-date virus detection system to date) picks up a virus in one of the pop-ups on the website. May I suggest uploading it on http://www.2shared.com? Also, did you compress the game data by using the option in the file menu?

[miguel1 17]

I would have liked to help but I can't simply because Nod 32 (I'm fairly sure thats the most up-to-date virus detection system to date) picks up a virus in one of the pop-ups on the website. May I suggest uploading it on http://www.2shared.com? Also, did you compress the game data by using the option in the file menu?

 

 

Here it is, http://www.2shared.com/file/8286671/7c1f1eb5/mist_v02.html?errorMaxSessions=MAX_IP&cau2=MAX_IP

and yes i think it is now working, but i'm still not sure because nobody has told me if it is working or not.

 

enjoy

[Tomo2000 60]

Well, I played a bit and found some glitches. Here is a few things to fix:

 

Maybe change Male Player sprite. I know for a fact that not very many people like seeing the Default Character as their own character and that is a big turn-off.

Also, when Basil joins your party maybe you should add a Caterpiller script. You can find them on the forum. It makes whoever in your party follow you.

Also you should probally give directions to get to the King. It might just be that I'm to stupid to find it :D or just that it is a big village.

 

Also, would you be able to give me the script for the minimap at the bottom-right corner and the script that loads everything before the title screen? That would be appreciated.

[miguel1 17]

Thanks for playing Tomo2000

1- good point, next time i will change the male sprite

2- caterpillar, i thought about that, but i then forgot XD

3- well you have bulitens in the forest showing the way, but i sould put more directions anyways

4 Sure

I'll post them tomorow because they need to be translate, and also because some need pictures with it

[Tomo2000 60]

I'm a bit sad to say that those code boxes don't work and instead just paste it all onto one line once in RMXP. If you wouldn't mind would you be able to send me the download link for any file with the script in to Script area? Sorry to be a pain.

[miguel1 17]

the site where i downloaded is in portuguese( which i can't remenber...), that's why i edit my post. i'll translate tomorrow, and open a new topic explaing how they work because the need insturcions, it can't just be copy paste.

I'm sorry for my previous post, i then realize that i need to put instrucions and images too, sorry XD

[Polraudio 122]

Here are a few issues i had ran into and please dont get mad im just trying to help your mapping skills.

[zane203 8]

I'll review it this weekend =D, im looking forward to playing it though ^_^

[Kiriashi 117]

I think with the house at the bottom he was going for a side door house. Well actually I know he was, yet that is a really bad idea. I've played through a bit and have come to see that your NPCs are a little bland. They all say the same things, and most of the time there is no point in talking to them. (And remember, this is all just criticism, so don't think I'm angry or anything ;) ) You're shops interior needs to be in the sam- no, all your buildings' interiors need be relatively the same size (and a little less important, shape) as your exteriors. It clashes way too much. Here is an example shop based off of your map.

 

http://img64.imageshack.us/img64/3626/shoppster.png

 

Try to change your map with my map in mind. You don't have to make what I made, but I am showing you some basic concepts. I know, the screen-tone and blur didn't turn out well...

 

A few more things you should change are:

 

1. 
   
   The things you can find in the various pots and shelves. Use an AMS to put both of those text strings together with a Wait - .25 - seconds command or two so we don't have to go through two texts.
   
   
   The large empty spaces everywhere.
   
   
   Bland and semi-pointless maps. I.e a forest map or two.
   
   
   Improper grammar, spelling, and dialogue.

 

I'll give you a few more pointers when I finish the demo today or tomorrow.

[miguel1 17]

ok guys thank you for your reviews.

 

Polraudio: at the time i dind't know how to make a decent exit, now i do!

and also there is nothing missing in that house, the entry is on the side, if you follow the map you can see the blue dot. I tried to do some side doors so that it can be different and that all the house don't have the same entry, what do you think, sould i make them all the same entry? thanks

 

zane203: thanks, looking forward to hear your review

 

Kiriashi: do you also think it's a bad ideia to make a side door house?

about the npc, well i didn't know what to tell them to say (LOL) but there is a part in the game where you have to talk to them, but the rest, i know it's really bad, XD

about the shop thanks for the advise and the pic, too

and last, about the grammar, i'm actually portuguese, so it's natural that I make mistakes, but what annoys me is that if I want to show anything on the internet, I have to put in English, Portuguese and some many other languages, too, are very undervalued.

 

anyways thanks for your reviews

miguel1

 

PS: I will now be working in those scripts request, just wait a little longer TOMO2000

[miguel1 17]

Ok Tomo2000, I've post the scripts you have asked

Here they are:

Fake Loading Bar: http://www.rmxpunlimited.net/forums/index.php?showtopic=3555&pid=28554&st=0entry28554

Minimap: http://www.rmxpunlimited.net/forums/index.php?showtopic=3556

 

if anyone wants more scripts from my game just ask ;)

 

miguel1