EmilyAnnCoons 7 Report post Posted February 22, 2007 Ok, so...I'm not satisified with JOH: CoC's first chapter AT ALL...it NEEDS work, but I just can't think of what to do to change it in any way...I mean...everytime I re-write it, I change lines and so forth, but the main occurnences are the same...and they just aren't satisfying to me in the slightest...I NEED people to tell me what I can do to change it around. What do you think would be a better idea then smashing up the boat? The following elements MUST be in the first chapter: Val's rage mode They discover the 4 lords are against them Some kind of fight between Zach and Mike Something that makes Zach and Jessica realize Valerie isn't an evil person Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Dark Dragon 0 Report post Posted February 22, 2007 I see...you know what I think ? DAZE WHERE ARE YA ? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
EmilyAnnCoons 7 Report post Posted February 22, 2007 haha, yeah, he could probably come up with something Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Grandor 0 Report post Posted February 23, 2007 I actually could give this a try, but unfourtanetly I'm so busy, I might not be able to do so. I'll give it a go, once me and Daze have are story done for the team game. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
EmilyAnnCoons 7 Report post Posted February 23, 2007 well, that would be nice...I don't want a full chapter...I just want some basic ideas for the chapter... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Grandor 0 Report post Posted February 25, 2007 Yeah, I seem to be more clear for my schedule but I still have a bit of homework to do, so I'll see when I'll be able to attempt this. Daze doesn't seem to be on for a while. He said he had computer trouble in some other topic so I don't know when he'll be coming back. If he doesn't show up for a considerable time I guess I'll have to do the story on my own-which I got no problem with but it would be better if we both worked on it. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
EmilyAnnCoons 7 Report post Posted February 25, 2007 yeah, that is true... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Grandor 0 Report post Posted February 25, 2007 I'd give him a few days, before we officially call him off. I know it may seem unfair but if we want to get this team project done we got to get started some time. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
EmilyAnnCoons 7 Report post Posted February 25, 2007 agreed to that, Grandor -nods- Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
