Enigma 10 Report post Posted June 17, 2010 Hey, Guys I really need some help with this story. A little Editor's note Currently the Story is Untitled, So I would Appreciate any suggestions for a name Second of all, I'm trusting you all to not steal or use my ideas with out my permission, I am in the process of obtaining a copyright for my works Thirdly, This is a RAW Manuscript so expect errors, try not to let that detract from the story and please help me correct them to the best of your Ability. Lastly, I'm going to post only the first chapter for now, If you all like it tell me and I will post more Up to chapter 6 is typed and I've handwritten up to chapter 11, since I hate typing stories on the computer. So here it is... Also, it might seem a bit short, but that just my writing style :shifty: Chapter 1: Nothing Personal Contact me for details [/size] 1 Incongruous-Behavior reacted to this Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Siverix 4 Report post Posted June 17, 2010 47 much? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Enigma 10 Report post Posted June 17, 2010 47 much? Interestingly Enough, I didn't know what you were referencing till I googled 47 I suppose its like "The Hitman Series", but I haven't really delved much into that series. Also, alot more character are going to be introduced in subsequent chapters. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Siverix 4 Report post Posted June 17, 2010 yeah im referencing our bold clone hitman friend but the most intriguing part for me is what's the girls name? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Enigma 10 Report post Posted June 17, 2010 She came up to him but kept a safe distance; she wasn’t an honor student for nothing. “You’re Megan, right? Megan Nore from Caster High?” Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Siverix 4 Report post Posted June 17, 2010 sorry i wasn't paying attention apearantly :sweatdrop: Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Enigma 10 Report post Posted June 20, 2010 UPDATE Editors Note: I think I've got a name for it, I might call it Agent. Hmmm, still thinking about it well, here is chapter 2. Chapter 2: Line of Sight contact me for details Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Enigma 10 Report post Posted June 20, 2010 Editor's Note: Not a double post, Just wanted to get two chapters in today (。◕‿‿◕。) Chapter 3: Operation Wolf contact me for details Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Siverix 4 Report post Posted June 20, 2010 I think what you should name it something like night time assassins oh and there are a few mistakes im prety sure there is no such word as unlink :nono4: oh its a really cool story :alright: Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Dark Den 4 Report post Posted June 20, 2010 Great story keep it up. i agree with siverix a name like midnight assassin would suit the game. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Incongruous-Behavior 2 Report post Posted June 20, 2010 (edited) A few grammatical flaws littered the story, and a couple of run-on sentences- but nothing to ruin it. In fact, I enjoyed it. Good going, sir. I disagree with their recommendations, though. I personally think that type of name is a bit cliche. I'll give you my own opinion once I found out more. Edit: No more continuations? Edited June 24, 2010 by Incongruous-Behavior Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Enigma 10 Report post Posted July 1, 2011 I have more chapters but I will be posting them on deviant art maybe after i get copy right or some other protection Share this post Link to post Share on other sites