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[Tenoukii 0]

Hello! So i've just finished the basic outline of my opening cutscene (woo!) but i can't really think of a way i can develop it! (boo!) so here it is:

Youtube Video ->Original Video

Please take a look, and reply with some improvements.

I know, the mappings boxy, but i'm really bad with caves and stuff. The annotations don't go away/come up in time, first time using Camtasia. And there are some spelling and eventing errors (mainly with UMS boxes, but thats because i missed a command out). But anything else? Tips on mapping or scripts (as in the dialogue) are welcome. Music too! (the current BGM is Joe Hisaishi btw, A Road To Somewhere from the Spirited Away soundtrack.)

Thankks

Edited April 9, 2011 by Tenoukii

[kellessdee 48]

Doesn't look too bad so far, as you said the caves are too blocky, think nature, its random and caves are created over long periods of erosion, etc. Best thing I can think of is to check out these maps (Made by Leon, I assume no credit for them.) Cave Mapz

[rgangsta 43]

I think you should let the player choose the time limit when they enter the doorway. Besides that, it's really good.

[Tenoukii 0]

Thank you for the caves mapping thingy (: i've changed the tileset to the Earth Cave and it looks way better now, although I have kept it slightly blocky on purpose since I plan to revisit that cave later on and say that it was carved out by people xD

And with regards to the time limit, I did think of doing it like that, but I have things that depend on it being where it is atm (to make the time spent on that map slightly longer). But thanks for the suggestion!

I do still think the script is a little weak and could do with alot of improvement, so if anyone has any ideas they would be appreciated! :D

[kellessdee 48]

Hey no problem! I figured it may be perfect, because I just saw those map examples recently myself (they are actually back from 2007/9 or something) and found it perfect since you were showing off your caves :) As for the script, it actually doesn't seem to bad...The way I like to look at writing dialogue is by imagining these people are real and how they would actually interact with each other.

[Tenoukii 0]

Well I've just put up a project post with the whole storyline and some screenshots of the *new!* (woo!) cave :P

I'm still pondering weather to attempt some voice acting :D

[kellessdee 48]

to be perfectly honest, even if you had an amazing cast of voice actors, (to me anyways) voice acting + 2d games just do not mix properly. it can easily get confusing...and to me it just doesn't feel right. plus I can read a hella lot faster than any voice actor can act out, so in general I usually opt out of the voice acting. I mean, if you wanna take a stab at it, don't let me stop you, but it may be a good idea to put an option for no voice acting as well.

[FranklinX 37]

It looks pretty good. The mapping looks empty.