QuesTMajoR 4 Report post Posted November 12, 2012 Hi guys! I was just wondering about the Correct emotion that I will show up with this ORATION, I need this ASAP co'z this will be presented on Friday... Any Comments about the correct Emotion and Pronunciation will HELP me A Lot. THANKS in Advance! The Tyranny of False Values By: Gonzalo Gonzales I am the youth of the land I am told that I am inconstant and frivolous That I am soft and easy going I am accused of being supercilious and cynical, of not having the right attitude And since I do not have the right attitude My leaders tell me that they do not know where this country is headed for That they wonder with a gloomy sense of foreboding, what shall I do with this land when it was left to me as my heritage, And when it is willed to me as my own I am the youth of the land I am easy going and parasitic I am irresponsible I do not stand before you to whitewash my errors, I admit the accusations hurled against me are in great part true But in all justice, in all fairness, In all deference to truth Do not hold me entirely accountable for my failings, do not overburden me with the sins of the world Do not crucify me on the cross I did not fashion For, if you, my accusers are led astray by the veneer of democracy deceived by the shame of formality Do not expect that I will be serious minded and constant Do not stand Outraged if I flaunt the tinseled trappings of my forebears If you, my accusers have not progressed from politics to statemanship Do not demand that I mature form childhood to manhood As I moved the earth at twenty For you, My leaders are of today and yesterday. Yours was the youthfulness that first saw the light of freedom dawn, mine was the youthful spirit that sees the light of liberty imperiled. Your was the hand that struck at the heart of an empire, mine was the hand, born to build an eternal. Demand of me, but teach me before you demand, do not train me into a leadership that cannot be mine, do not show me an indolence I can never afford, do not accustom me with arrogance I can never enjoy, do not lead me into a way of life I shall never know. For I cannot build without my strength, I cannot suffer without any hopes, I cannot live without my dreams. Give me leaders, who shall lead lives fraught with hardship and sacrifice, who shall demand of themselves before they demand of me. Give me leaders, and theirs will is my command Give me leaders, and theirs is my destiny to shape Give me leaders, and I shall follow them to the ends of the earth. QUITE Long, But I already memorized this Oration... I need some emotions.... THANKS for all! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
madanchi 18 Report post Posted November 12, 2012 (edited) I don't know wht an Oration is, but I've highlighted below in red the mistakes. Hi guys! I was just wondering about the Correct emotion that I will show up with this ORATION, I need this ASAP co'z this will be presented on Friday... Any Comments about the correct Emotion and Pronunciation will HELP me A Lot. THANKS in Advance! The Tyranny of False Values By: Gonzalo Gonzales I am the youth of the land I am told that I am (two of the same words in one line) inconstant and frivolous That I am soft and easy going I am accused of being supercilious and cynical, of not having the right attitude And (don't start with and)since I do not have the right attitude My leaders tell me that they do not know where this country is headed(heading) for That they wonder with a gloomy sense of foreboding, what shall I do with this land when it was left to me as my heritage, And (comma then a captial) when it is willed to me as my own I am the youth of the land I am easy going and parasitic I am irresponsible I do not stand before you to whitewash my errors, I admit the accusations hurled against me are in great part true But in all justice, in all fairness, In all deference to (the) truth Do not hold me entirely accountable for my failings, do not overburden me with the sins of the world Do not crucify me on the cross I did not fashion For, if you, my accusers are led astray by the veneer of democracy deceived by the shame of formality Do not expect that I will be serious minded and constant Do not stand Outraged (outraged*) if I flaunt the tinseled trappings of my forebears If you, my accusers have not progressed from politics to statemanship Do not demand that I mature form (from*) childhood to manhood As I moved the earth at twenty For you, My leaders are of today and yesterday. Yours was the youthfulness that first saw the light of freedom dawn, mine was the youthful spirit that sees the light of liberty imperiled. Your (yours*) was the hand that struck at the heart of an empire, mine was the hand, born to build an eternal. Demand of me, but teach me before you demand, do not train me into a leadership that cannot be mine, do not show me an indolence I can never afford, do not accustom me with arrogance I can never enjoy, do not lead me into a way of life I shall never know. For I cannot build without my strength, I cannot suffer without any hopes, I cannot live without my dreams. Give me leaders, who shall lead lives fraught with hardship and sacrifice, who shall demand of themselves before they demand of me. Give me leaders, and theirs will is my command Give me leaders, and theirs is my destiny to shape Give me leaders, and I shall follow them to the ends of the earth. QUITE Long, But I already memorized this Oration... I need some emotions.... THANKS for all! Edited November 12, 2012 by madanchi Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
dolarmak 23 Report post Posted November 12, 2012 I think what QuesTMajoR means by Oration is an 'oral presentation'. As far as the composition is concerned it's pretty good, madanchi is right with the spelling and grammer, you'll want to fix those few things he has highlighted. It's hard to judge what kind of emotion you are looking to convey by the writing alone especially for a presentation. You would have to record yourself (preferable video) to actually give you feed back on that aspect so we could see your face expressions, tone of voice, inflexions and your speach. If you upload one I'll take a look at it. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
madanchi 18 Report post Posted November 12, 2012 I think what QuesTMajoR means by Oration is an 'oral presentation'. Yeah you're correct I just googled it, not sure why I didn't do that earlier :P Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
QuesTMajoR 4 Report post Posted November 13, 2012 Okay guys, thanks for the feedback... Now, I started to Practice with a sarcastic personality, maybe quite confident emotions and boastful voice... How's that? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
dolarmak 23 Report post Posted November 13, 2012 Well if that's the tone you want, then go for it. Good luck. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
QuesTMajoR 4 Report post Posted November 22, 2012 Well Guys! 2nd Place isn't so Bad... but Im still a Loser.... : ( T.T Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
dolarmak 23 Report post Posted November 22, 2012 Congrats, second place isn't bad at all. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
madanchi 18 Report post Posted November 22, 2012 2nd place is pretty good! Congrats :) Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
