divinious 0 Report post Posted April 1, 2013 (edited) The Depth is a horror game the story line isyou (harry) are living with your girlfriend and late on night she suddenly dies, the police investigate, and the hospital says she died by cancer you wonder and cry about how it happened so fast, then you go into a deep depression and attempt to kill yourself multiple times and fail and that's when you start to get sick about a week after and you find a note stabbed to the door with a funny looking knife and a weird looking crest, it has an address on it you decide to see if he or she knows whats happening so you investigate Additional info:using rpgmaker XP monster pop out and chase concepts long storyline crooked man style anime pop ups Edited April 4, 2013 by divinious Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
dolarmak 23 Report post Posted April 1, 2013 I can see where you might go with this but your idea is really vague. You might want to add information about what type of systems you plan to use and maybe more information on how far you are with it. Screen shots are best but people will want to see that you've made a little progress. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
madanchi 18 Report post Posted April 1, 2013 (edited) Early in development so screenshots might not do it justice. The plot has potential, could be evolved over time into something more grand. It is a little vague right now as dolarmak said but hey, constructive feedback can only boost it. I suggest to work on the character and make his emotions/ thoughts a big focus to begin with. I don't know how you're going with the character but I think it's a good start to make him a little meotional as to what's really going on and if he'll investigate alone, take to the police or go with friends etc and what routes will he go down; bring weapon being cautiouse, go out with no weapon or supplies, or maybe tries to race where the note came from (finger prints, is the dagger vintage or standard modern etc, any specific markings/ crest on it) Edited April 1, 2013 by madanchi Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
divinious 0 Report post Posted April 4, 2013 there i changed it read it now see if its a bit better Share this post Link to post Share on other sites