shaggy91 0 Report post Posted December 7, 2009 Story: This is a story based on love, the value of friendship and revenge all twisted together for what I have thought to be a good story. This story has always been in my head since I was 12 and over time it adapted and twisted into something beautiful and I wish to show you my story in my 4 part saga please read view the screens and post replies all I need to keep me motivated is comments and helpful criticism. Robert Webb- Creator Before The Game 200 years ago hidden in the dense forests of the country Migoto the village of the shadow dragon ninja clan live carrying out contracts given to them by the people of Migoto. During the graduation of the villages kenshuusei a strange character approaches Houka the village leader and demands he marries the eldest daughter the village has to offer. They refuse. The stranger in a blind fit of rage strikes Houka unconscious and swears: "Every five years I will return to this village and I shall kidnap your eldest daughter". The village thought nothing of the threat until exactly five years after the stranger made his threat the villages eldest daughter Kusabana Ryoku disappears and a note is left. In a blinding state of panic and rage Houka quickly assembles a small team of Seiryoku, The best ninja the village has to offer. Tanetetsu ijirashii lead the group. A kind hearted and honest ninja who is also a merciless killer to all that oppose his clan. The team is sent on their mission 4 nights after the kidnapping and ventured out to seek information. over the course of 5 months they discover the man's location but also his name and his background from a old woman Hannya Kakan from the water dragon village she warned them not to fight the man not because it is a unfair fight but because she was scared for their lives. Hannya also told them that the man was no man at all but that he was a vampire a evil seed of hate that was hatched in the fiery pits of Hell itself. The creatures name was Makai a well known vampire in Migoto, most known for snatching girls as they come of age in all the great ninja villages. Tenetetsu swore he and the ninja who followed him would avenge all the girls the vampire stole across the land and darted off towards the creatures home. Upon arrival at Makai's Mansion Tanetetsu is approached by a elderly man who reveals himself as Marcus a magician from the eastern continent. Marcus also reveals his intentions to destroy Makai but instead of calling the vampire Makai he uses the vampires birth name Alucard. After telling Tanetetsu and the Seiryoku that Alucard cannot be killed only sealed within a body and passed down the bloodline of a chosen individual. Marcus believes that he has been chosen by the sealing tome so is granted permission to accompany the Seiryoku into the mansion. While inside the mansion the group encounters many traps and creatures summoned by the "Dark Arts". Alucard reveals through his own magic that amplifies his voice through his home that before the group are aloud to face him that they must face one final test so they are attacked by a giant half man half wolf creature. During the fight with this creature Marcus is struck down the the wolf and passes the tome to Tanetetsu and tells him that he believes he is also chosen at that moment the other ninja bring down the wolf. Just as Tanetetsu walks towards the horror that awaits them Marcus warns him that if he uses the tome he curses his clan. The curse would be that they must keep the tome within fifty metres of Tanetetsu's body dead or alive or the seal will break. Tanetetsu takes heed of the warning and continues to face Alucard. The battle with Alucard was a true nightmare the 4 Seiryoku relentlessly attacked Alucard. Trying to protect Tanetetsu while he re-sited the sealing spell (which was hard due to it being in a foreign language) but was successful after some time and sealed Alucard within the fibres of his body. Awaking in the confides of his home in his home village Tanetetsu learns the death of three of his comrades which was placed in the tomb of heroes inside the Dragon Forest Just north of the village. Tanetetsu and the other surviving ninja is granted a early retirement lived long and happy lives and is both now buried in the tomb of heroes. Present Seriph is a long serving Seiryoku of the Shadow Dragon Ninja Clan shrouded by a mysterious past begins his day like normal until he finds out his assignment was a fake just to get him out of the village while a group of water bandits hired by a mysterious employer steals the ancient tome hidden within the Tomb of Heroes. Seriph defeats the water bandits leader and rushes back to the village only to realise he is too late. His home, friends, family and only love are dead. Now is the time to avenge. Screens: Features: Using Mr Mo's ABS System to create a Real-time fighting experience Highly Detailed Mapping to make The Last Sunrise as beautiful as possible Slipknots Advanced Messaging System to create better conversations between characters Completely Non-linear Gameplay!!!!! Characters: Name: Seriph Achiho Age: 22 Sex: Male Bio: A quite and merciless killer of the Shadow Dragon Ninja Clan. Never failed a mission even walked away from 90% of them unharmed. Quiet and serious everything he says always has meaning. Amyee is deeply in love with Seriph although he does not realise it. The main protagonist of The Last Sunrise Name: Alucard Age: ??? Sex: Male Bio: Not a lot is known about Alucard other than he is a vampire. There has been speculation on whether he is or is not the first of his kind. The main Antagonist of The Last Sunrise Name: Amyee Brickes Age: 21 Sex: Female Bio: A very energetic and flirtatious ninja from the SDNC. Uses unusual methods in her assassination missions by which she lures the target to her by flirting with them. Has a close mission success to Seriph. Seriph is deeply in love with Amyee although she does not realise it. Name: Grandmaster Age: ???? Sex: Male Bio: The founder and leader of the SDNC a highly acclaimed ninja from around the world now retired and living the rest of his days in the big house just by Shadow Dragon Village. Credits: Mr Mo Cybersam Near Fantasia Constance Hawk-McKain Requests: I am looking for anyone who is willing to volunteer their skills to help me. I would really like this game to use as little RTP as possible. if you would like to help just message me asking what i need and ill let you know =] Characters Faces Custom Menu (something like DE:Dissolution but more ninja like =]) Icons An Original Window Skin Anyone who can customise Mr MO's Abs HUD Anyone who helps I will give an epic amount of credit to each one of you Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
CrimsonInferno 35 Report post Posted December 8, 2009 Sounds really nice. I love ninjas and ninja stories, I'm liking the scripts you used, it will defiantly add something else to this, which is great. But the screenshots don't show the face of the ninja. Could we see some? :P Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Polraudio 122 Report post Posted December 8, 2009 Looks like a promising game. No offense fut your maps are a little to square and bare. We have some mapping tutorials by Kiriashi if you wish to take a look. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
shaggy91 0 Report post Posted December 8, 2009 thanks you guys and yeah sure thing ide do anything to improve :) Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
shaggy91 0 Report post Posted December 8, 2009 Took alook at that tutorial yeh the guy knows what he is talking about helped me a fair bit =] Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kaylen 1 Report post Posted December 8, 2009 It looks good, but as Polraudio said, try to put a little more detail into your maps. Oh, and your story section is a run on sentence. Overall looks a lot better than my first project, plus I love non-linear gameplay. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
shaggy91 0 Report post Posted December 10, 2009 thanks kaylen yeah i have been workin non-stop on the maps since i read the tutorial on map making and i believe my maps look better now :) ill upload and replace my screens real soon Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Obsession 3 Report post Posted December 10, 2009 You don't need to take a screenshot from the event layer of the rpgxp window. Just make sure 'Dim to layers' is unchecked and you can take a better screenshot from one of the other three layers. Other than that, if you've planned this story out well before-hand, it shouldn't seek the fabled 'dumped projects' section. The first post could do with a more eye-pleasing layout, since it means alot to first time lookers, perhaps you could add bold and underline tags for headers and italics for quotations. The story follows Seriph Acheho a ninja who specialised in silent assassinations. Until. One mission that changed his life forever. He has arisen and only Seriph has the unknown power of this clan that can destroy the evil threat. Your Mission Has Begun. I'm going to go an ask a few questions to develop your concept, because it needs a tad more work. Feel free to put your answers in spoiler tags. > Why the name Seriph Acheho? > How is it that this unknown force can only be quelled by ninja's? What do they have others don't? >"only Seriph has the unknown power of this clan that can destroy the evil threat" - Is he the last ninja or something of the like? Or did he perhaps discover something? Its somewhat hard to elaborate between the two on how its written so perhaps you could elaborate. I shalln't say much more due the reason that it would be stupid of me to re-elaborate things already said. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Leon 55 Report post Posted December 10, 2009 Obsession, your questions remind me of an old saying: The difference between fact and fiction is that fiction has to make sense. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
shaggy91 0 Report post Posted December 11, 2009 thanks obsession you made me realise i didnt put much of the story up there no matter ive fixed that problem now and oh i didnt think haha thanks ill make better screenshots now lol oh and ive planned this for the last 6 years so its pretty well planned lol :) the story should answer all of you questions so give it a read and tell me what you think =] Share this post Link to post Share on other sites